Poetry
It has been a while since I've written poetry, so I wrote a poem last night. I posted it on my facebook and so far everyone has liked it, I wanted to post it here to see what you guys think about it. Sometimes I like to mess around in poetry and misspell words on purpose(so no need to correct the spelling lol), feel a bit creative for some reason when I do that.
Anyways here is the poem:
Tanryoku
A random guy who is poetically unstable
Listen to my story
Or better yet, my fable
Soothing voice, so trusting yet confusing
It goes left, it goes right
And your mind it starts polluting
Never again will I fall in the colored water
I could wake up the next day
As an addict or a father
The very definition of unique
Sucking up the world's talent
They started calling him a leech
A lone wolf that races time through the night
Searching for his long frozen heart
A melancholic disaster that wont give up this fight
A sarcastic fool that only appears every blue moon
Like a white petal on a red rose
Untouchable "Tanryoku"
You can call him unique overdose
By: Michael Darryl Chapman
Anyways here is the poem:
Tanryoku
A random guy who is poetically unstable
Listen to my story
Or better yet, my fable
Soothing voice, so trusting yet confusing
It goes left, it goes right
And your mind it starts polluting
Never again will I fall in the colored water
I could wake up the next day
As an addict or a father
The very definition of unique
Sucking up the world's talent
They started calling him a leech
A lone wolf that races time through the night
Searching for his long frozen heart
A melancholic disaster that wont give up this fight
A sarcastic fool that only appears every blue moon
Like a white petal on a red rose
Untouchable "Tanryoku"
You can call him unique overdose
By: Michael Darryl Chapman
Posted by BxS0ldi3R on Tuesday, September 29, 2009 01:00PM
- 10 comments
(link)
/
Keywords:
boredom,
poetry,
mikeh
« New BYOND Anime CSS(Tests) · Preparations for a Job Fair »
#10 BxS0ldi3R:
Welp, guess people don't like it, topic closing time =o
Tuesday, September 29, 2009 08:14PM
#9 Ray940:
Zaole wrote:
> it's awful
>
> being extremely random and "poetic sounding" does not make a good poem
>
> jesus the random crap you piece together keeps making me rage
LOL @ This guy, roflmao.
Tuesday, September 29, 2009 05:44PM
#8 Kisioj:
I don't like it. I agree with opinion that your poem is completely random, I can't find it's meaning.
PS. I write poems too but not in English.
Tuesday, September 29, 2009 03:35PM
#7 Zaole:
what's the point of putting in writing (and displaying to others) something that, although originally intended to convey a poignant but often subtle meaning, instead bears meaning (if any?) solely to the author and can not be deciphered by anyone else?
oh wait that's right there isn't any point to it, you're just bad at poems
Tuesday, September 29, 2009 03:02PM
#6 Rugg:
Shit
Tuesday, September 29, 2009 01:45PM
#5 BxS0ldi3R:
lol He was only giving his opinion, though it's not even that random, I guess it's that only I can piece everything together because I know exactly what I'm talking about in it.
Tuesday, September 29, 2009 01:30PM
#4 Charliegrooms14:
Zaole wrote:
> it's awful
>
> being extremely random and "poetic sounding" does not make a good poem
>
> jesus the random crap you piece together keeps making me rage
U KNO WAT DATS Y PLP LIEK U GET NEGATIVE COOL POINTS
Tuesday, September 29, 2009 01:29PM
#3 BxS0ldi3R:
That's the whole point, read the first two words lol
Tuesday, September 29, 2009 01:28PM
#2 Zaole:
it's awful
being extremely random and "poetic sounding" does not make a good poem
jesus the random crap you piece together keeps making me rage
Tuesday, September 29, 2009 01:27PM
#1 Charliegrooms14:
I think it's a really good poem it's so smexy only a mastermind could have made it ^^
Tuesday, September 29, 2009 01:13PM